The American Motherhood Problem
Nicholas Kristof, in his New York Times article “If
Americans Love Moms, Why Do We Let Them Die?” (2017), asserts that despite the
misconception that America seeks to embrace and assist motherhood, they are
causing more harm than not and endangering thousands of mothers’ lives. Kristof
describes and asserts the problem with motherhood in America with a sentimental
story of an innocent mother who lost her child, and continuing to explain the
problems with the Medicare system in our country today with relatable stories
and practical problems. The author’s purpose is to inform the American public
with the lack of attention and care given to child bearing mothers across the
country in order that they too join the fight to assist and care for mothers.
Through a passionate, strong, but still compassionate tone, the author
establishes an assuring relationship with the American readers as he assures
them that such is not the way, concluding “and this is pro-life?”
While the many other organized and advanced countries of the
world have utterly eradicated almost all indications of danger associated with
motherhood, our beloved country has fallen further and further behind moving in
the other direction. This is simply and plainly unacceptable and must be
changed and repaired sooner rather than later. While the debate and controversy
over abortion and un-born lives continues to carry on, it’s time we turn our
attention to the lives we do have and ensure that these lives stay safe,
secure, and healthy. We cannot be pro-life if we do not seek to help each and
every mother, something America has failed to do to this point. Approximately
two women a day experience preventive strokes that put their unborn babies’
lives in danger. That’s more than 700 lives every year, a number far too high
for a sophisticated and advanced country like ours. Yet, the root of the
problem and the crux of the issue stems in unplanned pregnancies. There are
many young people who are sexually active but fail to take the preemptive steps
to prevent pregnancies. Thus, the problem not only originates in the hospitals
and the medical programs, but many of the people that have unplanned
pregnancies. However, much of this is to the fault of the US and society for
failing to give women access to such preemptive measures. If America could simply
eradicate these unplanned pregnancies, then women who do not want to be pregnant
will not be giving birth, and more mothers will be protected. That is not to
say, that the number of babies brought into the world should be limited, but
only mothers who wish to give birth should be birthing and motherhood would become
much more safe. Take skydiving for example, if people who did not want to
skydive took part in the dangerous act, there would likely be many more
injuries and deaths thus making skydiving more dangerous. Similarly, if more
mothers who have encountered unplanned pregnancies continue giving birth,
motherhood will become more and more dangerous. If the government does their
part in assisting this problem can easily be fixed, as the Obama administration
exemplified. Unlike the Republican health care plan, the Obama administration made
contraception free, thus preventing many women who do not wish to be mothers
from giving birth and taking part in a potentially life threatening ordeal.
Well hey there, E-Coops Scoops! Nice job on your blog. I do, however, have a couple things I believe you could improve on...
ReplyDelete1) In the first sentence of your precis, you say "If America..", "they"... I don't think America should be referred to as they because it's a place. Just a grammatical issue. Additionally, the third sentence seems to be a run on. I feel like you could find a way to make it even a little bit more concise.
2) Regarding your personal response, I thought you did a swell job of describing the issue! I do think it was too much summary. It seemed like your opinion got lost in you further explaining the information Kristof presented in his article... Perhaps try to make it more obviously clear that you agree with Kristof's stance instead of just repeating the points that he made.
3) Lastly, when it comes to your comparison of the danger of skydiving and the danger of motherhood, I think you could have found a better comparison. While I can see the point you were trying to make (that the danger of skydiving is a danger that one makes the active decision to take...and it should be the same way with motherhood..etc.), I believe you could have chosen a Mashal that was easier to understand as well as more analogous. The skydiving example just seemed kinda random and I think relating the issue of the dangers of motherhood to another health care issue/womens' issue would have made your point a lot more recognizable to your audience.
For the response:
ReplyDeleteShkoyach. I would just try to prove that there is indeed a relationship between the maternal death rate and the inaccessibility to contraceptives through statistics.